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Drafts

Startle through the moonlight
Howl hollow in the rain

Drown in lotus blooms
Twist into the sun

Search yourself  in comic strips
One frame at a time

Test the wind and mark your course
Leave shadows far behind

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Original version
(Stream of consciousness type of thing)

Startle through the moonlight river
Twist into the sun
Yellow battered baby bunkers
Fortunes on the run

Oyster clusters to the sky
Fragrant lotus blooms
Catacombs and fresh milkbones
Silk and cheese straws too

Howl away the sorrow
Break the back of pain
Wholly hollow megaphone
Rusting into the rain

Whistle to the whistle wind
Pour a glass of brine
March a mile on malt
Stop at the turnstile

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10 responses »

  1. Oh, Hero, this is wonderful!! I love every single word & line–but must remark ‘specially on “search yourself in comic strips”, and “leave shadows far behind”, which are great. I must have “startled through the moonlight” last (even though it was cloudy/foggy), because I feel terrific this morning–full of His joy. Thank you for your prayers earlier this week–you’re the best, brother!

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  2. I enjoyed both of these – fun and surprising imagery, especially in the stream of consciousness segment. Nicely done! 🙂

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  3. I agree with Caddo in that there was something really wonderful in this . . .how it made me feel. Like a draft that He is working on, so I can leave those shadows behind. Thank you!

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  4. I love the way your stream of consciousness played with the words here. Maybe it doesn’t make as much sense in some places, but the way the words rhyme & “bounce off ” one another is really neat.

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